Free Writing Awesome Cards

Free Writing Awesome Cards

Cards:
-Family
-Identical Twins
-A Fart-gun
-The Cricket Ground

At Veggie intermediate a Family of Onions were getting ready to showcase their new invention.  It was the schools cricket game and the identical twins Gedian and Fabian were banned from the cricket ground. After they changed the water fountains to spray garlic water instead of normal water. But this time their going to use their new invention A Fart-Gun. Gedian and Fabian laughed to themselves and walked towards the cricket grounds. They stood at the top rows of seats and sprayed the fart gun. The farts went everywhere. Then the principal Mr. Broccoli yelled at the twins. Running up to them the twins slid down the railing. They ran into the night laughing and spraying the fart gun as they did so.  

Waihanga Tuhinga: Mōhiti

Waihanga Tuhinga: Mōhiti

Hi my name is George I’m fit for my owner. Fiona she has been wearing me for 50 years. My left eye is cracked but it will get fixed soon. I’m made to help her see but I’m scared that I’m letting her down. Will she get rid of me? She can’t get rid of me. She starting to get other things to help her not just me. Last week she got a hearing ad. R.Right hearing aid the third is very mean to. He mocks me and when Fiona goes to sleep he laughs at me about my cracked eye. He said that Fiona is going to replace me. I go to sleep I woke up to the sound of sing birds. Fiona opened the window. She started singing back, she has a lovely voice. She goes to have a shower I look away. She got dressed  and put on her Rose and Peach perfume. I could smell the it smelled nice. She went down to make breakfast and I heard a rumble from up stairs. Down came Alice, Aaron and their cat Bellatrix. Alice and Aaron are Fiona’s grandchildren. “Good morning Nan” said the children still half asleep. I could see the delicious food she cooked. Scramble eggs, toast, fresh fruit, orange juice and spaghetti. Then the kids eyes lit up they sat down and dug right in. Even Bella had a delicious breakfast well to he add,jbbdmaf badfbbkkdabfr. Fish guts and mice “did you wash your hands nan?” said Alice. “Yes of course I did” said Fiona. It was 12:30 and Fiona and the children went to the park. I looked around there was a lot of people. When a child roller skating bump Fiona. I fell to the ground “sorry miss” said the child as he roller skated away. A English Bulldog later than picked me up. The owner picked out of its mouth. Oh the owner was a kind old man with sparkling grey eyes. He looked around for a bit and saw Fiona. He walked over and gave me to Fiona. “Thank you very much” said Fiona with a smile that could light up a room. “I’m Johnson-a- Frank Johnson” said the Frank. “I’m Fiona, Fiona Fergerson” they both smiled at each other. “Nan, nan can get ice-cream?” said the kids. “OK would like to join us Frank?” Said Fiona. “Ah sure” he replied “Let’s go your mums picking you up in a hour”. Said Fiona. They walked to the Dairy and got ice-cream and Frank and Fiona got black liquorice “yuck” said the kids. “Black liquorice is yuck!” yelled the kids. Bella shock her head. Fiona took the kids home and Frank said thank and gave Fiona his number. He walked away shortly after the kids and Bella left with their mum. For dinner Fiona cooked Ramen noodles the steam went in my eyes. When I heard a knock knock. I was curious to see who was there, but R.Right hearing aid was asleep. Then he woke up, Fiona walked to the door and it was Frank. He walked in they both ate dinner together. That was a good night I thought. But that was last year today Fiona and Frank and getting married. Fiona put on her makeup and we went to the wedding. Fiona was crying as she walked to Frank. She started to cry. After that they took the wedding photos and I was in them. Now I know that Fiona would never replace me. R.Right hearing aid was wrong.  

This is a Draft if there is any mistakes please comment. Thank you for reading and in the comments tell me if you like it. 

100 Word Challenge week 1 term 4

Social Experience at local park.

At Blossom Meadows a social experience was held. Davy Grey a local T.V host did a social experience. What would you do if you saw legs coming out from the pond. Would you be a person that helps, or will you walk away and say you didn’t see anything?  The first person was Nancy Baker who worked at the town bakery, she walked past and noticed something in the water. She screamed and before she could ring the police Davy and his crew stopped her. “I was so frighted it’s such a nice town what could've happened?” said Nancy.

The Piano

WALT:write a descriptive piece of writing from the old man's point of view as he recalls his memories.

The Piano

Good bye said my wife sweetly as I looked into her kind eyes. I watch her as she closes her eyes for the last time. A month past since my wife’s funeral I play her piano, everyday I play her favorite song. I remember her she was a kind hearted person. She would always help those in need. I remember the war she waited for me to come back I was never there for her. I could never help, I could never do things right and that got my best friend killed.

I play the piano more and I feel like she is right here next to me. I can see her dancing around the room as I play the piano. She sits and holds my hands I tell I miss her and that I’m alone without her. She starts playing the piano with me “I’m sorry” I say. “I was never there for you and now you're gone” I say. “It wasn’t your fault it was no one’s fault” she said. She hugs me I look at her as she slowly disappears.

I carry on playing the more I play the more I remember, the war. I fought for my country and in return my best friend Brandon got killed. I didn’t follow orders I went the other way Brandon took a shot for me. I was supposed to die not him I never forgave myself after that day.

I was about to stop playing the piano when I see my son George on his 7th birthday he always wanted a horse to ride.  I see him running around the room sadly George died with a heart disease at the age 27. He stops running then under the piano came Gabe George’s son. “It’s ok grandpa” he said “I miss dad and grandma too”.  “You were always a smart kid” I said he giggled. He started playing the piano with me and from then I would start teaching kids how to play piano. Gabe is my first student I know life will be hard without my wife and George but life moves on.        

Sierre Leone Mudslide

Week #45

World Events for your writing

I’m sure you won’t have missed the events in Barcelona, Spain this week or the devastation caused by the mudslide in Sierre Leone and the violence in Charlottesville, Virginia. The prompt this week uses the emotions that the media has shown us.

Latest prompt

As I said at the top of this page, the events around the world this week:

… as it came rushing towards us we…

Sierre Leone Mudslide

“Rumble, rumble!!!” I woke up. I couldn’t sleep, my house kept shaking. I went outside to see what was shaking my house. I looked up at a tall mountain, there was a mudslide coming towards us. I tried warning people but they all said I was crazy. I ran back to the mountain with some sticks to try and block it off but it was too late. I closed my eyes as it came rushing towards me, when my best friend Selma pushed me. Selma got stuck in the mud I dived in I couldn’t find her she was gone.

The Magician

The Magician

I open my eyes and think, who did this to me? why am I here? did I do something wrong? I look up slowly at this huge building I had a feeling that I was here once before. I have a flashback to my childhood this was the orphanage that I grew up in. I remembered more the only reason I went in the orphanage was because my family home burnt down. It only burnt down because of me! My mother told me not to use the oven. I escape I but I never saw my little sister or mother again. I put my head in my hands, a single tear came from my eye. I get up and sadly walked and open the dark oak door and saw, a picture of me as a kid. I turned around “Slam” the door loudly shut, I run up to it I pull and pull but the door was locked. I look at the stairs, with a thought, who locked me in here? I need to get out. I cautiously went up the stairs. I see my childhood self running down the stairs, I watch him, he went through some boxes. I remember there was a back door to the yard. I quickly went down the stairs, and I moved the boxes. In the boxes I saw rusty old trophies, dusty art and board games I liked chest the best. I liked learning new strategies to win the game. I finally moved all the boxes and found the back door. I open the door, with a fancy golden knob, and carefully crept out the garden.  There was a rusty fence, with a little brown gate, I walk towards it. There was a creepy voice calls me back to the building. I have a feeling like there more in the orphanage, that meant to be me, but why? I kept going up the stairs then I saw my little old bed. On my bed there was a little teddy bear with a nametag that said Mr J. Stuffington. I loved he as a kid he was my favorite toy. I was heading to go up more when a gust of wind came out of nowhere. I look out through the window there was a tornado of wind it was huge. I could was it it couldn’t be… my mother and sister? I run down the stairs to the back door. I got to the front of the orphanage but I  kept getting pushed back the winds was very strong. I kept running and running towards it but the wind pushed me back into a puddle. My clothes were soaked I looked up the tornado of wind kept getting bigger and bigger. I saw books and leaves everywhere on the ground I noticed an umbrella I had an ideal. I grabbed the umbrella and climb up the ladder beside the orphanage then I made it to the top of the orphanage. I jumped the wind blew into the inside of my umbrella pushing me up. I was up above the tornado I didn’t notice it before but there was a person at bottom of the tornado. In the stranger's hand I saw a stick it looked like the stranger was controlling the tornado. I was above my mother and sister but I didn’t think about how to get them down. I let go of the umbrella I fell right through I was right beside the stranger and tackled him. The tornado stopped everything fell including my mother and sister. I grabbed his stick and pointed it at my mother and sister they gracefully glided down, they looked as light as a feather. I looked at the stranger as he got he looked like me? He spoke

“I am no stranger I am the magician or what you call me your conscience”. Really I thought

“I will bring you back to your world” he said.

“I have one question why did you bring me here” I said.

“I brought you here so that you know that it wasn’t your fault that your house burn down, nothing was your fault and that you should have no regret. I said

“When you go back you will not remember this every happened and you mother and sister will be with you” he said

He grabbed his stick and started floated he zapped us and we were back. Now I can live a happy life with my family once again and will not have any regret.

Whale Fantasia

I loved exploring I could never keep still. I am now swimming in the Pacific Ocean I felt like a fish. With my two friends Erin and Mandy we explore the unknown. We went in and out of caves swimming past schools of fish. We gracefully glide through the water under all the waves. They looked like white clouds getting pushed by the wind. I twist and turn as the sun shone brightly through the water. I felt as if I was in a dream. I swim above coral and sand I felt like I was flying. I touched some sea weed it was as slimy as a slug.

As we ventured deeper and deeper into the unknown, the light of the sun is becoming dim. Their was outstanding fish in all different colours. I guess they can see just fine in the dark parts of the ocean. We all swam up to see the light of day when we all saw something big swim past. We all started swimming to it. We were right behind it when all of a sudden it stopped. We all swam in front of it and then out of nowhere two other whales came.

They were a family it was an amazing site. The whales looked so majestic we touched their skin it felt as hard as concrete. One of the whales did a twirl with it’s stomach up. We could see all the barnacles stuck to it, they looked dull and bumpy. The barnacles looked like sand with rocks in it.

All of us twist and twirled as the whales made boisterous noises. They swam down deeper into the ocean they got smaller as they swam away . Now I can tell the tale about how I swam with whale. There was still lots and lots of ocean to explore. But we all guessed that our adventure was over. We swam to the surface it was late afternoon. We told everyone about our adventure and I will always remember the time I swam with whales.            

The Ridge

The Ridge

As I rowed my canoe across the ocean look at the sea lions swimming I look at the ridge. I arrived at land I took a big gulp because today I am going to ride up the ridge. I got my mountain bike and I was off I was shaking, because there was a chance that I would come back down. There was rocks and tight turns but that was OK because I love the challenge. I kept riding until I got to a stream so I jump it and risk getting hurt or go around the long way. I took a big risk but I made I could see other little streams I knew I could do them as well. As I road up the mountain it kept getting steamer and steamer.   Till the point go that I couldn’t ride my bike anymore so I started to run. I was hard with the weight of my bike but I kept going. I made it to a flat part of the mountain I was feeling peckish. So I grabbed some food and water from my bag and then I went up more. I made to the top and looked down I was above all the cloud. I took a big gulp and went down. It was bumpy but fun it was hard to keep my balance. I arrived but to the beach but there was a fence in my way. If I can ride up that mountain I can get over this fence. I pressed my front wheel to the fence I did a front flip. I layed down on the beach I watched the sun go down. Now I can tell people about my amazing adventure.

Thinklink isle of skye

This is writing from last week it was about a man named Danny Macaskill riding up the isle of skye.

But Then The Flash Made Me…

But Then The Flash Made Me…

I’ve been working on this invention for weeks and I’ve cracked it. I Barry Oaklyn has almost made a connection with aliens. With my machine the Best Alien Locater Device or B.A.L.D for short. I can connect with aliens I turned it on. I looked in the night sky the aliens were coming but they were coming in too fast. They crashed I looked around in the shuttle.  There was a flash of light I walked closer to it. But then the flash made me one of them!

“Ahhhh”! I woke up it was all a dream.



This week for writing we did the 100 word challenge and in our piece of writing we had to only 100 word
no more no less. Hope you like my story and if I made any mistakes please comment and I could do better
in my other story's.

Titanium slow writing

WALT:use a technique to carefully craft our writing.

Titanium

If wasn’t so gullible, if I was normal, if I had never walked down the corridor then things would've gone right. I’m scared, worried, terrified I was a fool to think this time would be different. A piece of a wall slowly crumbled as a tower of tables collapsed. I looked at the walls as I walked down the broken school I notice a door quickly shut. I carefully walked out the door  passing a police car I jump on a bike. I hurry down the street. I nervously sweat, as I scrunch my face putting it in my hands. I arrived  home but then…  

This story will be continued...

Somalia

WALT write a narrative through the eyes of one of the crew, or robots.

Somalia

It was a cold winter's morning not far off the coast of Somalia. I was in my container waiting to get to the loading dock when I heard a “bang”. I could hear heavy boots hitting the vessel there was screaming. I heard laughing and whimpering “Oh no a pirate ate my soup my beautiful soup!’ yelled a chef, I fell over. The vessel turned around we were going the wrong way. I knew something wasn’t right pirates must have taken over the vessel. “Click click” I  could hear someone trying to unlock my shiny white container  it opened.  I went up through the roof hole in the container “Where’s all the stuff?” yelled a confused pirate.

I jumped behind him and when he turned around he ran away in fear.  All the other robots emerged from their containers and ran after the pirates. I was going right up to the top. I saw the other robots pushing the greasy haired pirates. Robot 626 pushed  a smelly pirate overboard into the freezing water, robot 626 laughed and laughed. I toss 626 a floaty ring to throw at the pirate. At least he got a bath said 626. I continued going up I looked down at the vessel and saw the pirates bowing to the robots.

I got up to the captain's room the real captain and the crew were tied up. There was 3 tuna smelling pirates in the captain’s room. I pulled the first pirate and through him against the white metal wall. I grabbed the second pirate and through on the first pirate. Then I slowly creeped up to the pirates captain and taped on his shoulder. He looked at me with a nervous face he had sweat dripping down from his head. I pointed outside when the pirate saw his crew all down on their knees he was shocked. All the robots were cheering.

I headbutted the pirate and he collapsed I freed the captain and his crew. Then we got all the pirate and tied them up. I gave the captain’s things back too and a  steaming cup of coffee. He smiled gladly and all the robots went back into the shiny containers. “What you saw today stays on this boat” said the captain with a serious voice.

Beyond The Lines.

 WALT: write a narrative through the eyes of one of the children or one of the soldiers.

 BEYOND THE LINE!

I was in the PA2 vessel it like the size two elephants. The beds were damp and there were cobwebs  everywhere. I was alone on a cold bed preparing for the battle. We were making a plan to save our land we gathered outside. I was the chief we made a huddle to keep ourselves warm. We started to give pep talks to ourselves. Saying why we are here and what we were fighting for we were all scared. We arrived at the turkey battle field the ramp went down.

We ran down I heard the boots sloshing in the mud. I was frightened of what would happen to my friends and to myself. I rushed to get cover I saw my friends getting shot others slipping on the mud getting stuck in the   barbed wire killing themself. There was bloody water on the ground bombs falling from the sky. I took cover I could hear gunshots.  I saw my friend David lying on the  sand with a gunshot wound in his leg he pointed behind me. I turned around and then…  boom a bomb fell
right beside me knocking me onto the sand. Everything went silent I felt broken I blacked out.

“Wow” said Timmy my grandson “scary” said Coby my younger grandson holding onto me. “Please don’t go back there” said Timmy “yeah grandpa that sounds scary.” said Coby “don’t worry the war is over and we won.”I said the both of them squeezing me tight. “Those are letters that I sent to grandma when I was in the army, I wanted her to know that I was OK” I told them.

Tom Trueheart

             Tom Trueheart

It wasn’t always like this until Trolls from the dark came sent from the leader of the dark, Ezmar. They destroyed our house looking for our father's sword. Taking my 6 brothers and their princess brides. I just made it out now it is time for me to stop the darkness and save my brothers. But there’s only one problem I’m the size of a thumb. But with my father’s sword of light I know that I can do it.

It’s mid Winter and I only got a bark shield and a coat made of chicken feathers. The darkness is infecting animals and plants. My sword of light can restore the good in them. But the darkness doesn’t just infect animals and plants it also can infect people like me. If that happens then the darkness will go into the sword and all is lost for the forest.

The only way to stop the darkness is if I go on to the highest mountain in the forest. But it is where Ezmar’s castle is.On the way there will infected plants, animals and tr-tr-trolls I said in fear. It is going to be quite an adventure. I had to go back to the ruins of my house.  But there looking in the bits of the house was three trolls. They had collars on that said Big, Buff and Brainless. I thought to myself wow this will be easier than I thought. I thought again can I turn things good that was first bad?

I thought of my older brother Stan he was the smart brother. “Remember Tom trolls are big and tough all you have to do is to look and be like a troll” said  Stan in my head. But how can I be a troll I look around I saw long sticks and leafs. I wonder what I could do with them. I thought of the twins Chip and Chop. Chop used sticks as stilts and pretended he was tall. Chip loved fashion he would get leafs and make coats out of them.

I got the sticks and stitched leafs on it with some string I had in my pocket. I made it stink with some mud that possums play in. I got on the sticks I remembered what Chop tort me. I walked over wobbling like jelly this was hard. I got over and said nervously “ummm Big, Buff and Brainless it’s ummm your break time I will fill in”. They look at me at me I was sweating like it was summer. Then they smelt me I could see warts all over their faces. “OK we go now” they said and their breath was horrible.  They walked away the flowers beside them died and turned into crisp.

I jumped over on the ruins of the house something was hurting my back it was the sword. It was glowing I walked around the sword shone a light under the broken part of the roof. It was a map of Ezmar’s castle the trolls must of dropped it. Under it was a telescoop I look through it and saw and infected squirrel coming.

I ran it was chasing me but then a leaf fell on my head. I fell over I turned around the squirrel was coming closer.  I got my sword out it started to glow in the squirrels eye’s. It walked back then a light from the sky pick up the squirrel. The squirrel started to spin then POP he was put back down but this time the squirrel was good. I heard a scream from Ezmar’s castle part of the forest was normal again. If I turn things good Ezmar gets weaker and weaker.

The squirrel started to talk to me.  “Your father was a friend of mine the sword can help you talk to animals I will help.” said the squirrel “OK but what’s your name”? “Sam” said the squirrel “to the tree’s” I said heroically. I could fell the snow falling on my head I licked a snowflake it was freezing. The Sam stopped I look up oh no it was acorns they were falling everywhere.  “I know why” said the Sam “The trees are infected with darkness.

The trees started to shake the Sam said “we have to get to the top”. We started to go up and up. “Ahhh is this a bad time to mention I’m afraid of heights” I said shivering. The darkness was coming the Sam jumped. “Go to my friend Barry he can dig you down to the roots of the tree” said Sam. He threw me off down a hole I looked up Sam was gone.

I ran over to a sign WARNING BARRY’S BORROW COME IN AT RISK OF YOUR LIFE!!! ): I walked closer there was a big scary shadow. I walked back slowly and out came a… cute little bunny.  “How’s there?” said the bunny “Hello my name is Tom is Barry here?” I ask  “Sam the squirrel told me that you can help”  “ what do you need help with?” said the bunny. “My 6 brothers and their princess wife have been kidnaped please help I got my father's sword.” I told him “Ok I  will help you now where do we go.” he ask “Dig down to the roots of the tree’s”. I order “hop on let’s go.” he said and we were off.

We digged down and then we made it to the roots of the tree’s. “Go Barry go right to the end and don’t stop. I will shoot the roots then the trees won’t be evil any more.” I said Barry started to run I held my sword up. But the roots started to grown they were trying to block us in. “think of what makes you happy it will make the sword more powerful.” said Barry I thought of my family my house and the forest. Then swoosh a yellow light came from the sword it blasted the tree roots. We went outside and all the trees were normal. But it wasn’t over flowers were getting infected.

They were going for me Barry and I started to run. I fell over I got back up the flower got something and through it at me. “Noooo” yelled Barry he jumped in front of me.  The dark infected his body “go to the big oak tree” said Barry. The darkness infected his whole body he wasn’t a cute bunny any more. He was a dark monster with sharp teeth and red eye’s. I heard a laugh from Ezmar’s castle she was getting stronger.

I hurried to the big oak tree there was something carved in the tree. It looked just like my sword. I placed my sword in the tree then I heard something from the top of the tree. I was a gizmo making bird sounds down came a beautiful eagle “Hi” said a deep voice “I’m Eddy”. “Hello I’m Tom can you help me safe my brothers from Ezmar. “I’m sorry but I’m looking for the man who called me here. Do you know him”. Said Eddy “yes I said because I am him” I said. “Let me see the sword” he ask “ok” I said. I held it up Eddy’s eye stared at it “hop on” I hop on Eddy’s back and we were heading for Ezmar’s castle.

We were flying I could feel the wind in my face. We land on the roof I could see my brothers and their brides. Through a window they were locked in a cage. There was a troll snoring on a chair behind them. I put down some rope and climbed down. I ran in “guy’s guy’s” I said “Tom”! They all yelled. “Don’t worry I’m here to help” I said I pick the lock with a stick.

They all hugged me “Let’s get out of here.” I said but my rope was gone. We turned around and there was a dark shadow in front of us. It was Ezmar “Hello you just got here why leave now” she said with a grin. She saw something in my bag. “What’s this” she grabbed the sword. Left the room laughing the troll asleep woke up. “Do I put them in the dungeon?” ask the troll. “No we will put them in the cage of doom!” said Ezmar.

I were in the middle of the castle Ezmar was in her thorn. The sword was

right beside us I slid through the cage. I grabbed my sword “Ezmar” I yelled. She turned around and shot something dark at me. I held the sword up I blocked it. I thought of my family a light lifted me up and through the door came lots of animal. I went down and blasted Ezmar she vanished the forest was good again.

My brothers and their wives came up to me. They said that I Tom Trueheart was now the King of the forest of light. All the animals surrounded gave me a crown they screamed.  “Yay Tom the king of the forest of light” I smile.

Arctic Circle

WALT :create an internal monologue for the main character.

“Screch screch”! I welled this tree for years. Day after day and all I get is one little apple. “Screch screch” aahh an apple crunch crunch! Delicious can’t believe all day for one crunchy apple. That was hard work I wish I could get more apples.Well back to work hhmm… what is that in the snow. I walk closer and closer it’s a box. Could this be a box of food I have been asking for. I touched it “Ouch”! It shocked me I touch it again zzzzzzzzzzz.

Aaaahhhh my hands and arms are orange and sparking I leaning back on the tree. Then big red apples grew on the tree I picked one CRUNCH !!

Yummy thank you box it try to go to Tim’s house. What I never said you could leave come back here. Stop come back with me why wastes your magic with Tim come and grow my apple tree.

The box rolled away come back if you're not coming back i’m going to take you back. Got you I jumped on the box now give me all the power.  POP hmmm the box is gone any way time to give all the food I want.

Aaahhhh my foot is a box got to get home quick. AAAHHHHH my other foot it’s a box Poof the lower part of body is a box. Tim Tim help I will make your tree grow big red apples please help. Nooooooo POP I was now a box, but I could still see. Tim walked out he looked around then he walked to his tree and was trying to grow apples.  

The Ruin

The Ruin

It was a peaceful day in Narnian city. I was looking for answers, why did Haven Nanotech make me?  Why was the city was like this? Who made the city like this? I was on the 87th floor of Haven Nanotech and I saw a metal crate marked Facility B, that must have some answers, so I pushed it out of the window. I ran down and kicked it open and in there  was information about me. What’s that I heard a sound I heard it again something was watching me. I ran fast in fear of what they would do to me.

I slid down a wall and hopped on my motorbike. Work, work I was saying in my head and then I was off. I could hear the crinkling sound of the dry grass in my wheels. I heard beeping then the machine shot out little machines then they started to shoot things at me. At the side of my motorbike I grabbed a stick bomb and threw it at the side of a car. It went off but it didn’t break them I was in shame.

I had to lose them so I drove into a tunnel but they had lights. Then I saw something AAAHHH! I just dodged a car, there were lots of them. The little machines where doing something then they scanned the tunnel. After one of their circle bottons went purple. Then zap a purple laser came at me. Again zap the other one did the same thing. But then I saw a light and I had a plan. So at the end of the tunnel I put the last of my bombs on the ceiling it felt exciting. Then it went off, the thrill of it made me just feel safe. But it wasn’t over yet.

As the gyrocopter came back to get me. I took a big risk and it felt great. I stabbed the machine it was challenging I felt scared but I think I did it. I blacked out not knowing if it was killed. After I felt amazing and worried if they might try to get me again. I walked away feeling like a champion.      

Something Fishy

WALT: Use correct punctuation
Something Fishy

I was in the laundromat reading my novel about  fish. As I flipped the page a blue glowing light shone in my eyes. There I saw a sock swimming like a fish. I looked around no one was there I walked up to the washing machine. I pulled it and it opened I put my hand in it. It felt wet, I felt it again it was water it stayed in its form. I wanted to see more so I took a big breath and jumped in.

The inside looked like the ocean there was a sock fish, shirt jellyfish and beany turtles. The water was a bit soapy but don’t think it bothered them. I swam to the coin coral there were schools of fish swimming gracefully.The fish are all different colours red, orange, pink, green but I like the blue best. Then I saw the fish that lead me in here I followed it. I caught it but it got away I didn’t see it coming out of the shadows it was a Jean Shark!!!!

I froze in fear the shark's teeth were as sharp as knifes. I swam away afraid of the creature. I quickly went into the coin coral. It was coming in fast I hid behind a coral. I saw a hole of light it must be the way out, I swam. The shark was behind me then… PLOP! I was back in the laundromat I turned around the big shark was now normal jeans, or was it I was about to touch it. When a deep voice say “I think those are mine” I looked at him, it was a shark with a shirt on I gasped.